Wow.
How did I win with this piece in the competition? Damn man, excellent production and composition. The only things I have issues with is volume and man, for a first attempt that's really God damned impressive. Screw you :'(
Oh, and the things I was having an issue with was the clap (a little loud, just a few less notches than normal and you'd be good) and I like the kind of kick sample you're using to have a lot of BANG. So, my suggestion would just be a considerable amount more treble/high mid and a little more bass (making the kick shorter would also reduce a few compression problems that you'd get from doing this) and it'd give the song a really intense hardcore almost side-chain-ey feel. Would really make the kick stand out, and I could REALLY get into the song then :)
Fucking excellent man. Keep it easy dude;
-Zenon