Usually, i write long reviews :)
So lets see what i can do.
(oh, and, try not to take any of this personally...your a really cool guy)
I liked the scratches in the beginning. I thought it was gonna lead to something very quick, so it followed its genre. DNB is usally very fast paced, but i feel as if it starts at a slow pace at about 100 or less BPM.
I like the song in general, but remember to change the notes of the bass, not just the choir.
Try to make it out a little more lively. Remeber that the first kind of Drum N Bass was jungle, which was governed by drums, bass, a small lead, and vocals. Drum n bass artists took out the lead, and the vocals, and simply had a drum, and a bass.
The drums were good, but i think it needs to be about 20 or 30 BPM faster. The bassline, i ADORE that bass synth. But i would truely love to hear its full potential. I just hear a bass bump every so often. When i should hear an entire bass riff, man!
Add pads in the backround, some glitches, awesome drum licks, and make the bassline fuller and make it follow the voice!
Good work, but like every musician, you aren't perfect. Get practicing! ;)
I can see you doing amazing works in the future :)
-zenon- or Zenonpi...whichever you prefer :P