What the fuck is wrong with the first reviewer?
Seriously,this may not be 100% pro, but this sure as HELL doesn't deserve a 0. Fuck, if hes so PRO, then he could have at least god damn told you that this could ahve cae in softer, this may have doe good here, in stead of 'blah blah blah this sucks im pro i can help you'.
FUCK.
The melodies and percs are actually very well written, I was expecting something a little more n00bish for some reason. I was quite satisfied.
Your transistions are kind of blurry, and by that, i mean, some synth just kind of but in out the middle of no where.
When you bring in that drum line, the Cascada ish type drum line, I think it would have been better if you had that hard saw synth filter in there, since it sounds VERY empty. The piano riff is enjoyable, but it needs to be accompanied by other things, but not so many of those things that the piano is butted out and you can't tell its the focal point anymore.
Like I said before, your melodies are great. Just, the mastering gets really muddled. You can't really hear the kick.
If you are going to add something in the melody, remember to get rid of something. Maybe you have 2 melodies playing on one synth, I dunno. Just try to keep your melody synths as simple as Melody lead + Bassline + Pad(thats a maybe, if it doesnt sound full enough already).
To make the kick more apparent, add a compressor on the main channel, then the entire song will be more contained (then you cant add so much, that will help with the whole muddling bit. You add too much, and it'll distort) then, add a bass boost on your kick. (EQing it could also work, but i just find it easier to use a bass boost), then make it a decently high but low frequncy. Like, around 70-85 Hz. Then, keep changing the amount of bass, so that it doesn't distort. Then, add something that is high ended (like a hat, or a click, or something) to play on the same times that the kick plays. Then you can hear the kick, and it'll have a great amount of bass.
Also, remember to adjust the volume in your track a LOT. Fade ins, fade outs, filters, new synths, and remember, just cause you spent 4 days on a 16 bar synth line doens't mean that it needs to out there so everything distorts. Keep some things in the backround, and bring them out when needed. Nothing really needs to be blaring.
Good work, I am actally quite impressed.
-zenon-
NeuFunk - Back Again 
