{Mercury} Herro.
In a chinese voice.
Lets get some things straight, shall we, before I start to review. Take none of this personally. It will probably sound unintentionally extremely critical, and most of the critism I'll give you, you won't like, and probably wont use. Just don't yell at me for doing what you asked.
To the song.
The song starts out rather pleasently, even though I hate fast paced techno. Despise it actually, because it gets rid of the flow asnd groove that techno/dance/trance should have. Your open hat sample lasts too long with the tempo of the song, and that causes the beat to sound crowded.
The filter type thing you have going sounded cool, but it slaughtered my sensitive ears on my headphones. Be more reasonable when dealing with hi amounts of resonance.
You have this annoying "Go" voice in the song, and its just driving me insane, with the amounts of excess noise that it brings to the track. Like, man, just use another instrument that will add to the song instead of add some trebly sound effects to it >:/
About the drums. This is the only real thing that bugs me in the song (other than the tempo). The kick lasts too long, and that makes a "Doo-WHUMP" sound on subs. Sounds like shit and offbeat on sub, is what I'm trying to say. I already went over the open hi hat, and the clap is... a generic 80s/90s clap. Come on! You could have taken the time to grab a clap sample off the net or used a snare drum or something. Also, the drums are rather non-diverse. Standard 4 kick with trance beat that never changes, and has no breaks, no break ins or break outs, nothing. Boring percussion.
As the song just finished and is looping now, it just dawned on me that I had better tell you about how this song is mastered.
It is noise! The bass you have is a "whoop" when it should be a shorter "dup" to compensate for your horribly fast tempo. The kick sample is too long. On really good speakers, this would sound like a big rumble sound, with no indication of a kick/bass division. Which is the reason why I don't like to have bassy bass synths... they are so hard to control and get them perfect.
The song is not repetitive, exept for the percussion. Good work there.
So now that I'm done ripping the song apart so it now a pile of very thin ribbons, lets go over my scores.
Originality sits at a very very medicore 4. You usually wouldn't think so, with the nice string riffs and the fast tempos and the cliche electronic synths, but that has been done millions of times on newgrounds. It would be nice to hear this kind of stuff in the professional industry, but on newgrounds, it just sounds like you are trying to blend into the crowd with Dimrain47, g-rave, and many others.
Diversity has earned itself a 7 in my books, siply because of the percussion. The halftime break you have sounds great, but when you get to the faster tempo part of it, it just resumes its normal trance beat.
Clarity is an 8. Kick drum, bassline, and "go" vox. Nuff said.
Effort is a 10. I never deny a musicians ability to put effort in his songs, and this song is very evident that you tried your hardest. Good work.
Overall, its a 7. The song itself is very good and enjoyable, but the mastering bugs me so. I like to hear my percussion very clearly, and this song too much of a treble feel along with the background synths.
Good work, my friend. You did a good job.
REMEMBER: I'm not trying to sound like a dick. I'm just trying to help you in the best way possible.
-BN
